Elise+Locke+2011

Elsie Lock 2011.

In the far distance you could hear the the galloping of the horses flying towards the city. We started pulling up the main gates and getting everyone ready because when the enemies came they would have to be ready because it would be a battle that no one would forget ever.

Finally after that brain stressing few hours I have got a idea for the elsie lock competition. It had been a brain stressing few hours because I had been thinking for ages and it ended up very tiring, I just didn’t know what to do. I was dying for a great topic because this year he was aiming for the top and I would not settle for anything else. Planning this story would be good I thought to my self and I would work day and night to make it great. While dawdling to school my mind kept coming up with amazing ideas for my story and I just wonted to sit down and write write write and just keep writing. I have been like this for years, I can’t get enough of writing its like setting your imagination for whatever you wont and the reason why I like it so much is just because I like to think it is real. Now you might think I am really dumb whoever is reading this but its me and I can’t change that and I don’t wont to.

Later that night I had been writing for hours on end and I was so tired that I couldn’t think of any ideas to go with my story. I had already write 600 words in a small amount of time. So altogether I was pleased with my self. After another hour I just gave up and went to bed. Straight when I hit the feather soft pillow I was out to it. I had the best dream imaginable it was of me winning the Elsie Lock competition.

Later that week I sent my entry in for the competition and was so pleased with myself. My day kept getting better and better. I felt so great when I got home that I didn’t think anything in the world could spoil my hopes. But when I got home my parents announced we were going to Australia. This just wreaked everything, if this was at a different time I would of been so excited but this, I hated because this wreaked my chances with the Elsie Lock competition I thought quietly to myself. I was so tired when we boarded the plane at three in the mourning because I couldn’t stop thinking bout the Elsie Lock competition. When we got there we stayed in this flash five star motel and had a great time. We went to all the theme parks during the week.

Two weeks later we got back and I had forgotten all about the competition. When I checked my emails I hadn’t won but I didn’t mind because I had had the time of my life in Australia and I really wonted to go back.

Elsie Lock 2011.

In the far distance you could hear the the galloping of the horses flying towards the city. We started pulling up the main gates and getting everyone ready because when the enemies came they would have to be ready because it would be a battle that no one would forget ever.

Finally I thought to my self I have got a story for the elsie lock competition. It had been a brain stressing time because I had been thinking for ages and it ended up very tiring. I just didn’t know what to do. I was dying for a great topic because this year he was aiming for the top and I would not settle for anything else. I planned this story would be good and I would work day and night to make it great. As I was slowly walking to school I kept coming up with great ideas for my story and I just wonted to sit down and write write write and just keep writing. I have been like this for years I can’t get enough of writing its like setting your imagination for whatever you wont and the reason why I like it so much is just because I like to think it is real. Now you might think I am really dumb whoever is reading this but its me and I can’t change that.

Later that night I had been writing for hours on end and I was so tired that I couldn’t think of any ideas to go with my story and more. I had already write 600 words in a small amount of time. So altogether I was pleased with my self. After an hour I just gave up and went to bed. Straight when I hit the pillow I was out to it. I had the best dream of me winning this Elsie Lock competition.

Later that week I sent my entry in for the competition and was so pleased with myself. The day kept getting better and better. I felt so great when I got home that I didn’t think anything could spoil my hopes. But when I got home my parents announced we were going to Australia. This just wreaked everything, if this was at a different time I would of been so excited but this I hated because this wreaked my chances with the Elsie Lock competition I thought. I was so tired when we boarded the plane at three in the mourning. When we got there we stayed in this flash as five star motel and had a great time. We went to all the theme parks during the week.

Two weeks later we got back and I had forgotten all about the competition. When I checked my emails I hadn’t won but I didn’t mind because I had had the time of my life in Australia and I really wonted to go back.

__Thursday 9 June 2011__

**Ha ha good twist on the competition, are you happy with this for an entry?**

**Next Steps - Target** **Have varied and interesting sentence beginnings, and get creative with your language (you are more than capable, look at the examples below)**

**I had been thinking ... I wanted a great topic ... I planned this story ...**

**Racking my braining and thinking for ages was tiring, all I wanted was a great ... or While dawdling to school my mind continued to race with fantastic ideas ...**

Elsie Lock 2011.

In the far distance you could hear the the galloping of the horses flying towards the city. We started pulling up the main gates and getting everyone ready because when the enemies came they would have to be ready because it would be a battle that no one would forget ever.

Finally I thought to my self I have got a story for the elsie lock competition. I had been thinking for ages and he just didn’t know what to do. I wonted a great topic because this year he was aiming for the top and I would not settle for anything else. I planned this story would be good and I would work day and night to make it great. As I was walking to school I kept coming up with great ideas for my story and I just wonted to sit down and write write write and just keep writing. I have been like this for years I can’t get enough of writing its like setting your imagination and doing whatever you wont and the reason why I like it so much is just because I like to think it is real. Now you might think I am really dumb whoever is reading this but its me and I can’t change that.

Later that night I had been writing for hours on end and I was so tired that I couldn’t think of any ideas to go with my story and more. I had already write 600 words in a small amount of time. So altogether I was pleased with my self. After an hour I just gave up and went to bed. Straight when I hit the pillow I was out to it. I had the best dream of me winning this Elsie Lock competition.

Later that week I sent my entry in for the competition and was so pleased with myself. The day kept getting better and better. I felt so great when I got home that I didn’t think anything could spoil my hopes. But when I got home my parents announced we were going to Australia. This just wreaked everything, if this was at a different time I would of been so excited but this I hated because this wreaked my chances with the Elsie Lock competition I thought. I was so tired when we boarded the plane at three in the mourning. When we got there we stayed in this flash as five star motel and had a great time. We went to all the theme parks during the week.

Two weeks later we got back and I had forgotten all about the competition. When I checked my emails I hadn’t won but I didn’t mind because I had had the time of my life in Australia.

__Monday 23 May 2011__

Elsie Locke 2011

Characters:

Michael Bolt Matthew Colten

__**The New Kid**__

Story line.

Michael Bolt is the well known winner for the 100 meter sprints. He has won all of the sprint races that he has entered for. When a new kid comes to the school (Matthew Hollis) he thinks that it would be great fun to verse Michael at the 100 meter sprints when athletics day comes around. On the frosty mourning of athletics day they walk up to the track and get ready to RACE!

Story.

Michael Bolt is the winner of the 100 meter race! No body was really surprised about this though because he always wins all the sprints and has never lost a 100 meter sprint. Michael Bolt was quite tall and had kind of short brown hair and was great at sprinting. The next day well he was walking around school everyone said good job to him and said that tomorrow he will win the qualifier easily and he agreed with them. When he went back to class when the bell rang and then there principle came in with a new student that would be in there class. He was nearly as tall as Michael and had medium length blonde hair. The principle introduced him to everyone and his name was Matthew Colten.He had just come to Tauranga from Queens town in the South Island.

During the day Matthew seemed to get on well with everyone and quickly learned that Michael Bolt was the big shot at 100 meter sprints and that he has never lost a race. Matthew was looking forward to the qualifier for 100 meter sprint tomorrow. He always has liked doing sprints, but at his old school they didn’t do competitive sprints. The only problem with sprints for him is that he hates the starts. The rest of the day went by very fast for Matthew and he liked his first day because he got on well with most people and had a good time.

The next day at school Matthew was pumped up and ready for the sprints. It was a cold mourning when they got to school and the ground had fresh frost on it. MIchael was also looking forward to the race all though he already thought he would win he always liked running the 100 meter sprint. So later that day the 5 kids lined up for the big qualifier race. In it was Matthew, Michael and 3 other kids that didn’t even wont to be there. They all walked up to the starting line and got ready. It seemed like ages before the teacher yelled out ‘on your marks’ then ‘get set’ then finally he yelled ‘GO!‘ Matthew always hated the starts and this one wasn’t any better when he powered of the line his foot slipped a little but his start wasn’t to bad. Michael didn’t mind the starts and did well and got a good early lead. As they were running down the track Michael was just ahead of Matthew but Matthew was gaining on him quite fast. They had just belted past the 50 meter line which meant that they were half way there! Matthew had caught right up to Michael now and they were side by side. The crowd was cheering really loud and were amazed at how fast Matthew was. Matthew and Michael couldn’t here the crowd though because they were way to involved with the race. Matthew was now pulling ahead a bit! When they got to the 75 meter mark which meant they were three quarters of the way there Matthew had pulled ahead of Michael! Matthew was pulling away even more and then they passed the finish line.

It felt like the race went for ever for them, but once they were over the line and had stopped the crowd came and piled around Matthew. Michael was still in shock that he had just lost his first ever 100 meter sprint race. After the race had finished and the crowd had died down and they were walking back to the side line to sit down Michael came up to Matthew to congratulate him. Matthew thought that he was going to say something like beginners luck or it was a fluke but he did congratulate him. Matthew thought that that was good of him doing that.

In class when they got back later that day everyone was still amazed that Matthew the new kid had just beat Michael he was the first ever to beat him. After they had finished eating there lunch on the class next to them a sheet popped up with who would be running tomorrow in the big race. It had: Matthew Colten, Michael Bolt, Hamish Alerington, Jon Georgia and also Troy Jonathan. Matthew had remembered Troy from earlier that day Troy had shown him around the school. So Matthew went up and congratulated him. Troy was still amazed with Matthew about him betting Michael. At the end of the day the bell finally rang and Matthew was out of school and walking home when Michael ran up to him. Matthew found out that he was living just across the road from Michael. When they turned into there street Michael said good race today and bye and ran of to his house across the road.

Next mourning Matthew really didn’t feel like getting up at all. He was still tired from yesterday and the only reason he forced himself to get up was because he new that today was his big race. When he got to school in the mourning straight when he walked through the gate people came up to him wishing him luck and that they can’t wait to see him run in the race. By the time it got to 12 o’clock he was getting really really nervous because the race was at 12.30. At 12.20 he got called to come out to the 100 meter track for a meeting before the race. All five kids in the final big race were there and everyone was nervous. They got told there lanes and to warm up and get ready for the race that was about to start. At 12.28 everyone from the crowd was there. They lined up in there lanes at the line and got ready. There P.E teacher blew his whistle to signal that the big race was about to start. All of a sudden they heard ‘On your marks’ Get set’ then after what felt like a hour they heard the gun shot which meant ‘GO!’ Matthew was in the inside line and then Michael was in the line just beside him. Matthew got a good start this time when he pounded of the start line but of corse Michael got a better start. Matthew admired Michael starts how he was always got ahead with his early lead. They were racing down the track and Matthew couldn’t here anything at all apart from his heavy breathing and his pounding heart beat. Matthew could see the finish line just up ahead and his legs were aching from how hard he was running. Matthew was just starting to pull ahead of Michael but then all of a sudden Michael started pulling ahead they were going back and forth with who was in first and then it all came down to the very very last milli second. were Matthew and Michael were neck and neck but then all of a sudden Matthew slowed right down and stopped so then Michael ran past and won and Matthew second. Everyone was amazed about why he stopped and let Michael win. After the race Michael came up to Matthew and asked ‘why did you stop and let me win?’ said Michael Matthew replied and just said ‘I think you deserve it. You have helped me around when I came here and you were nice and everything when I won last time.’ So after Michael thanked him a lot he turned around and started walking of but Matthew called him back and said ‘But mate don’t expect me to go easy next time’

The rest of the year went well for Matthew and he couldn’t wait for next year to see what would happen. He continued playing his favourite sport soccer and ended up making the reps.

Mean job Taylor, I can picture it in by head perfectly! One tip is I think you need to space your paragraphs out, like on the first paragraph when it says on the next day that could be a new paragraph. //Thomas//